Authors note:
This is a childhood game on the monkey bars. In this piece i talked about cause and affect and how the story would have changed if the climax would change.
This short narrative that I read is about a simple childhood game called chicken. How you played this game is when someone said go you would grasp onto the cold monkey bar and the main goal was to knock the other person off the bars without falling off yourself. The pressure for this young girl was amazing, her entire team was counting on her to pull off a win here and it all comes down to her.
One Main event that happened in this story is when she wins because she was able to hold on to the other person and the affect is that her entire team is so proud of her and she is the hero who one the game now alot of people want to talk to her to see how she did it. Although she did win what if the story changed, what if due to the pressure on her to win and how strong the other person is she falls and loses the game for her entire team, now her entire team is disappointed in her, no one wants to even talk to her because she was the one who caused her team to lose.
I like the topic that you chose for this! I thought that you did a great job organizing the events in your piece, and explaining why you thought that it was a topic for this assignment. I think you could have separated the first sentence in your second paragraph to make it two sentences. Other than that, great job with describing the topic that you chose, I think you chose the right topic for this assignment.
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You explained your cause and effect with lots of details. But, you might want to check your spelling
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